July 11, 2007
Song-A-Week #22: Every Time I Close My Eyes
Here's a song... I will need seth to rock some drums on it, and the john/chase to rock the explosions in the sky solos. I like my octave doubles on this song... hehe...
Every Time I Close My Eyes
(C) 2007 Matthew C Good
Every time i close my eyes
It's like the darkness aids my mind
And all I see is through your lies,
And what a sight it is.
When you called to pick me up
Take me to that country bluff,
Tell me you weren't thinking of
someone else.
Baby, I have scrapbooks
Filled with fantasy.
And baby, I could've been there
If you were there for me.
I never got inside your head
Wasn't room with all that indiference...
I don't mean to misrepresent,
I really did believe.
But since you never came home
It's probably best if you just left me alone.
I'm already emotionally blown,
I might as well just leave.
Baby, I have scrapbooks
Filled with fantasy.
And baby, I could've been there
If you were there for me.
Baby, I got love songs
I will never sing.
Baby, I lost them
When you let go of me.
Every time I close my eyes
I dream a dream that makes things right
Where I don't have to sacrifice
everything.
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All electrics are the Sorento. Sounds a LOT BETTER. those old pots must've really be hampering the sound... or the tuners dampening the vibrations, or SOMETHING. I can't get over it. Unfortunately, the intonation isn't perfect cuz it aint got no tune-o-matic bridge, and I'm not sure I can retrofit one on there.
I'm currently editing drum tracks for Worlds Unknown and they sound killer except for I'm doing a LOT of editing and my protools is FREAKING OUT i need like four gigs of ram to do it... and the crash cymbals sound wierd over the edits with the auto-created fades, so i'll have to go back and manually do em, but that's hard since protools decided it doesn't like a BAJILLION edits in a session. BUT IT SOUNDS GREAT. Seth and I worked out some really cool loopy parts that he played and I edited... and reverse cymbals and stuff. Man I reall like his parts. "Hold On" has some rock to it too. And chase will like the end of Any Happier.
Well, let me know what you think about the new one!!!!!!
Posted by pedalboy at July 11, 2007 12:18 AM
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What's a guy gotta do to get somebody to listen to his song, already???
Seriously, I think this might be my best so far. Listen to it.
alright already...i wanted to listen to it a few times before i harshly judged you. i really like the melody on this song. however, i would do away with the strumming acoustic altogether. i would replace it with a piano arppeggiating and then allow the guitars to do some harmonizing stuff but keep it subtle (a la mono's the flames before the cold mountain" or the beginning of explosions' first breath after coma). the first few verses have it just be you singing but then at the end of the song have a choir of voices singing. so you get this huge buildup at the end. then after the vocal chorus stops, let the guitars meeble down as the falling action to the song and sing the line one last time or something like that. i think it would be stellar.
i'd use the sorrento for something lower on the neck and a tele or strat type (running through a good fender amp) to get the desired tone.
Pure.... Gold. I would also like what John is talking about.
BUT, in my mind I heard this really great cello playing a few things at the beginning and then starting it every time you sing "every time I close my eyes" (which is really just the beginning and then the end) haha. Anyway, and then instead of you singing harmony I had this great (rufus wainwright-esque) girl voice in my head (which was probably just my own voice, so USE ME on this song) and it just sounded AMAZING. But I agree with John, that perhaps you should try getting rid of the strumming guitars altogether. Just a thought. I mean, I could be proud of you either way. *smile*
Best song so far.
what's that ticking sound? i've had to read Poe a lot lately and it is making me paranoid.
i wasn't immediately grabbed by this song, even though i think the words are really great and the melody is nice. (it reminds me of rufus wainright, which means i agree with katie on the female voice. also it should build up to a huge ending.) but i finally figured out what was bothering me about it. i dont' believe you. the words tell a story but the music doesn't. there's a lot of pointless hope left in this guy, a lot of back and forth and confusion in which it sounds like he is just beginning to let go of all this fantastically dramatic baggage. but then the melody just sounds kind of bored, like you gave up on this girl too long ago to care. but it's not true! you are still engaged in an epic battle of love and hate, good and evil! anyway, you get the idea. opera-esque.
much love.
p.s. remind me to tell you about a song idea.
Good points all around. 5 points to you all.
I heard some Rufus in there too. So extra points to Katie and John.
Minus two points to John because he mentioned Matt using gear he doesn't have! FOR SHAME!
I think Kate has a few good points on the music not really going anywhere. But I, unlike Kate, thought that, because this is still a demo, that this is the rough idea of the song. I definitely needs some sha-bang, for sure, but I'm not exactly sure which direction to go. I think this song could potentially rock out, but I think something more interesting needs to happen.
My one good musical idea for this song is a response vocal line after each line of verse two. Maybe "her" voice???? Hrmmmmm, hrmmm, hrmmm. If I get to do any tracking on any of these finals (which I damn well better if you know what's good for you) I could whip something interesting up if you don't, just to see what you think. Like...
I never got inside your head (Blah blah blah line here)
Wasn't room with all that indifference (more blah blah)
Etc. till the next chorus... Make sense?
Anyway, sowry I'm late. Was busy last week hanging out in the Springs (Or, erm, Falcon, CO.) with Caitlin. You know how it goes.
On to "this" weeks song now...
Oops, I meant extra points to Katie and "Kate" not John...
